Latin Translation Marking – Senex Passage

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Nikhel
Total: 35/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 4/5
The old man told this story: after accepting the job immediately, I am lead to a house where a dead body was lying, the dead man's wife showed me the body; the face was intact.
Comments: "after accepting the job" shows ablative absolute well; "I am lead" should be past tense; "dead man's wife" correct; minor tense error only
2 4/5
She warned me to not sleep even for a short while, or a witch will eat his face, I promised that I would do my job faithfully
Comments: "warned me to not sleep" acceptable subordination; "even for a short while" good; "a witch will eat" acceptable; "I promised that I would do" excellent indirect statement
3 5/5
then the wife left, I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing; I kept watch easily
Comments: Perfect - all elements present and correct
4 3/5
then a weasel entered my bedroom; which I quickly fled. Suddenly however I sensed my eyes becoming heavier; I began to sleep.
Comments: "which I quickly fled" - should be "which I quickly chased away" (fugavi mistranslated); "I sensed my eyes becoming heavier" excellent; all other elements present
5 4/5
I got up at dawn; I ran to the corpse, terrified: the face was not eaten
Comments: "at dawn" acceptable; "ran to the corpse, terrified" good word order; "the face was not eaten" acceptable; minor: could be "thoroughly terrified"
6 3/5
The wife arrived, looked at the corpse, gave me my prize. I accepted the money happily.
Comments: "gave me my prize" - should be "gave me a reward/prize" (not "my prize"); ablative absolute structure lost; otherwise good
7 5/5
After this however, while the dead body was being lead through the forum, this miracle happened: the dead body became alive!
Comments: Excellent - all elements correct including "became alive"
8 2/5
I said to myself that the wife had interfered: the witch had not consumed his face but mine.
Comments: "I said to myself" - wrong person (should be "He said"); "the wife had interfered" not in Latin (should be "killed"); sense of witches consuming face present but confused
9 3/5
I immediately touched my face, my nose and my eyes were made of wax and when I touched them they fell off! I suddenly knew what had happened: the weasel was the witch and had forced me to sleep
Comments: "my eyes" should be "ears"; otherwise good with "immediately touched", "made of wax", "fell off"; "suddenly knew" excellent
10 2/5
then the witch had eaten my nose and my ears and had replaced them with a wax replica. They all laughed at me; I was the most stupid!
Comments: "They all laughed" acceptable; "the witch had eaten" should be plural "witches had consumed"; "replica" singular instead of plural; "I was the most stupid" good superlative
Eva
Total: 42/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 4/5
The old man told it in this way 'I accepted the job at once I was lead to the villa where the corpse lay. The wife of dead man showed me the body. The face was in tact.
Comments: "I accepted the job at once" good; "I was lead" should be "led" (spelling); "wife of dead man" acceptable; "The face was in tact" should be one word but meaning clear
2 5/5
She warned me to not even take a brief sleep so that the face was not eaten by a witch. I promised I would do my job faithfully.
Comments: Excellent - "to not even take a brief sleep" shows superlative well; "so that the face was not eaten by a witch" good purpose; "I promised I would do my job faithfully" perfect
3 5/5
Then the wife left and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing. Making the vigil was easy.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present and correct; "Making the vigil was easy" creative and accurate
4 4/5
Then a weasel entered the bedroom. I chased it away as quickly as possible. Immediately however I felt my eyes become heavy. I began to fall asleep.
Comments: "chased it away as quickly as possible" good; "I felt my eyes become heavy" needs comparative "heavier" but otherwise excellent; "I began to fall asleep" perfect
5 5/5
At first light I rose. I ran terrified to the corpse: the face by chance was not eaten.
Comments: Excellent - "At first light I rose" perfect; "ran terrified to the corpse" good; "by chance was not eaten" all correct
6 4/5
The wife arrived and saw the body. She gave me my booty. I was pleased to accept the money
Comments: "She gave me my booty" - "booty" unusual but acceptable for praemium; "I was pleased to accept the money" good rendering of ablative absolute and deponent verb; -1 for saying "my booty" when it should be "a reward" (though "booty" itself is acceptable)
7 5/5
However afterwards while the body was being led through the forum this miracle happened. The dead body came alive!
Comments: Perfect - "The dead body came alive" excellent; all other elements correct
8 3/5
He said he had been killed by his wife himself. The witch didn't want him but wanted to eat my face.
Comments: "He said he had been killed by his wife himself" - "himself" awkward position but indirect statement shown; "didn't want him but wanted to eat my face" - creative interpretation but loses precision of original
9 4/5
I touched my face at once. My nose and ears were now wax and they fell off at the touch. Suddenly I knew what had happened. The weasel was a witch and forced me to sleep
Comments: "I touched my face at once" good; "My nose and ears were now wax" good; "they fell off at the touch" excellent; "suddenly I knew what had happened" perfect; "forced me to sleep" good; all essentially correct with very minor issues only
10 3/5
then ate my nose and ears and replaced them with replicas made of wax. I realised this all: I was the stupidest.
Comments: "then ate my nose and ears" acceptable but missing pluperfect sense; "replaced them with replicas made of wax" excellent; "I realised this all" added phrase; "I was the stupidest" perfect superlative
Eloise
Total: 38/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 3/5
The old man said in this way,'accepting that I was led to a house where a body lay. The wife showed the dead corpse to me; the face was intact.
Comments: "accepting that I was led" - confused structure (should be "having accepted the job, I was led"); missing "the job" and "immediately"; "dead corpse" redundant; "wife" needs "of the dead man"; overall sense partly there but structural issues
2 4/5
She warned me not to sleep very briefly in order for the face not to be consumed by witches. I promised the job would be done carefully
Comments: "not to sleep very briefly" good showing of superlative; "in order for the face not to be consumed by witches" excellent purpose clause; "I promised the job would be done" good indirect statement; -1 for "carefully" instead of "faithfully"
3 5/5
then the wife left and I was alone. I saw nothing for a long time, I was doing the watch easily.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present; "I was doing the watch easily" good rendering
4 3/5
Then the weasel entered the bedroom; which I chased away quickly. However at once I felt my eyes become heavier; I began to sleep.
Comments: "which I chased away quickly" good relative pronoun use; "I felt my eyes become heavier" excellent comparative; "I began to sleep" good; structure slightly awkward with semicolon before relative pronoun
5 4/5
I got up at dawn and ran, terrified to the corpse. By chance the face was not consumed.
Comments: "at dawn" acceptable; "ran, terrified to the corpse" good; "By chance the face was not consumed" perfect; all essentially correct
6 5/5
The wife arrived, saw the corpse and gave the prize to me. With the money accepted, I was delighted.
Comments: Perfect - "gave the prize to me" good; "With the money accepted, I was delighted" excellent ablative absolute and deponent verb
7 5/5
However after, while the corpse was led through the forum, this miracle happened; the corpse had become alive!
Comments: Perfect - "while the corpse was led through the forum" excellent passive; "the corpse had become alive" excellent
8 3/5
He said he has been killed by his wife; and that the witches had not consumed his face but mine.
Comments: "He said...his wife" good indirect statement; "has been killed" wrong tense (should be "had been killed"); "the witches had not consumed his face but mine" excellent structure and clarity
9 3/5
At once I touched my face; my nose and ears had been eaten and replaced with copies in wax.
Comments: "At once I touched my face" good; "my nose and ears" correct; "had been eaten" - wrong verb (should be "were made of wax"); missing "when I touched them they fell off"; missing "suddenly I knew what had happened: the weasel had been a witch and forced me to sleep"
10 3/5
Everyone laughed at me, I was the most stupid.
Comments: "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I was the most stupid" excellent superlative; missing the full content about witches consuming nose and ears and exchanging them with wax effigies - this section should have more detail
Frido
Total: 37/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 4/5
The old man told this story: "After I got the job, I was taken at once to the house where the dead body was lying. The dead man's wife showed me the body; the face was still whole.
Comments: "After I got the job" good sense but less formal than ablative absolute structure; "I was taken at once" good; "dead man's wife" perfect; "still whole" adds "still" not in Latin; -1 for missing the formal ablative absolute structure
2 4/5
She told me not to sleep, not even for a very short time, so that the witches would not eat the face. I promised to do my job well.
Comments: "told me not to sleep" acceptable for monuit; "not even for a very short time" excellent superlative; "so that the witches would not eat" good purpose; "I promised to do my job well" - -1 for "well" instead of "faithfully"
3 5/5
Then the wife went away, and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing; it was easy to stay awake.
Comments: Perfect - "went away" good for discessit; "it was easy to stay awake" creative and accurate
4 3/5
Then a weasel came into the room, and I quickly chased it away. Soon I felt my eyes getting heavy and I started to fall asleep.
Comments: "came into the room" good; missing relative pronoun "which"; "I quickly chased it away" good; "getting heavy" - missing comparative "heavier"; "started to fall asleep" excellent
5 3/5
When it was morning, I got up and ran to the body, very scared. Luckily, the face was not eaten.
Comments: "When it was morning" acceptable but less precise than "at first light"; "very scared" acceptable for perterritus; "Luckily" good for forte; "was not eaten" acceptable
6 4/5
The wife came, looked at the body, and gave me money. I was happy after I got it.
Comments: "gave me money" acceptable; "I was happy after I got it" conveys the sense but -1 for losing ablative absolute structure (should be "Having received the money, I was happy")
7 5/5
Later, while the body was being carried through the forum, a miracle happened — the body became alive!
Comments: Perfect - "while the body was being carried" excellent passive; "the body became alive" perfect
8 2/5
It said it had been killed by its wife, and that the witches had eaten not its face but her face.
Comments: "It said" - should be "He said"; "its wife" acceptable but "his wife" better; "her face" - major error (should be "my face"); indirect statement structure present but pronoun errors significant
9 4/5
I touched my own face at once: my nose and ears were made of wax and fell off when I touched them! Then I knew what had happened: the weasel had been a witch and had made me sleep.
Comments: "I touched my own face at once" excellent; "were made of wax and fell off when I touched them" perfect; "Then I knew what had happened" good; "the weasel had been a witch and had made me sleep" excellent; -1 for missing "suddenly" (subito)
10 3/5
The witches had eaten my nose and ears and changed them for wax ones. Everyone laughed at me: I had been very stupid"
Comments: "The witches had eaten" good; "changed them for wax ones" acceptable for commutaverant; "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I had been very stupid" - loses superlative (should be "most stupid")
Carl
Total: 48/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 5/5
The old man told the story like this: "After I had accepted the duty, I was immediately led to the house where the corpse lay. The dead man's wife showed me the body; the face was untouched.
Comments: Perfect - "After I had accepted the duty" excellent ablative absolute; "I was immediately led" perfect; "dead man's wife" correct; "untouched" excellent for integer
2 5/5
She warned me not to sleep, even for a very short time, so that the face would not be consumed by witches. I promised that I would do my duty faithfully.
Comments: Perfect - "not to sleep, even for a very short time" excellent superlative; "so that the face would not be consumed by witches" perfect purpose clause; "I promised that I would do my duty faithfully" excellent indirect statement with correct vocabulary
3 5/5
Then the wife left, and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing; it was easy for me to stay awake.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present and correct; "it was easy for me to stay awake" excellent rendering
4 4/5
Then a weasel entered the room; I drove it away quickly. Nevertheless, I soon felt my eyes growing heavy; I began to sleep.
Comments: "I drove it away quickly" excellent; "Nevertheless" good for tamen; "my eyes growing heavy" needs comparative "heavier"; "I began to sleep" perfect; -1 for missing relative pronoun "which" and comparative form
5 5/5
At first light I got up and ran in alarm to the corpse. By chance, the face had not been consumed.
Comments: Perfect - "At first light" excellent; "ran in alarm" excellent for perterritus; "By chance" perfect for forte; all correct
6 5/5
The wife arrived, looked at the body, and gave me a reward. I was delighted to receive the money.
Comments: Perfect - "gave me a reward" excellent; "I was delighted to receive the money" perfect handling of ablative absolute and deponent verb gavisus sum
7 5/5
Afterwards, however, while the body was being carried through the forum, this miracle happened: the corpse came to life!
Comments: Perfect - "while the body was being carried" excellent passive; "the corpse came to life" excellent for vivum factum est
8 5/5
It said that it had been killed by its wife; that the witches had not consumed its own face, but mine.
Comments: Perfect - excellent indirect statement; "it had been killed by its wife" correct tense; "had not consumed its own face, but mine" excellent clarity and structure
9 5/5
I immediately touched my face: my nose and ears were now of wax, and when I touched them, they fell off! Suddenly I realized what had happened: the weasel had been a witch and had forced me to sleep
Comments: Perfect - "I immediately touched my face" excellent; "were now of wax" perfect; "when I touched them, they fell off" perfect; "Suddenly I realized what had happened" excellent; "the weasel had been a witch and had forced me to sleep" all correct
10 4/5
then the witches had eaten my nose and ears and replaced them with wax copies. Everyone laughed at me. I had been the most foolish man of all!"
Comments: "the witches had eaten my nose and ears" excellent; "replaced them with wax copies" perfect; "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I had been the most foolish man of all" - superlative is there; -1 for adding "man of all" not in Latin (very minor)
Margarethe
Total: 41/50
Section Mark Your Translation & Comments
1 4/5
The old man said: 'after receiving the job I was immediately led to the house where the corpse was lying. The wife of the dead man showed me the corpse; his face was intact.
Comments: "after receiving the job" good ablative absolute; "I was immediately led" perfect; "wife of the dead man showed me the corpse" excellent; "his face was intact" all correct; essentially perfect with only the tiniest stylistic preferences
2 3/5
She warned me to not even sleep for a short while or let my face be consumed by the shadows. I promised myself that the job will be faithfully done.
Comments: "to not even sleep for a short while" good; "or let my face be consumed by the shadows" - "shadows" instead of "witches" is significant error; "I promised myself that the job will be faithfully done" - wrong person and tense
3 5/5
Then the wife left and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing; easily I kept the watch.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present; "easily I kept the watch" excellent
4 4/5
Then a weasel entered which I quickly chased away. However I immediately felt my eyes getting heavier; I started to sleep.
Comments: "a weasel entered which I quickly chased away" perfect with relative pronoun; "I immediately felt my eyes getting heavier" excellent comparative; "I started to sleep" good; essentially perfect translation
5 5/5
I got up at dawn; frightened I ran to the corpse. Luckily, the face had not been consumed.
Comments: Excellent - "at dawn", "frightened I ran to the corpse", "Luckily, the face had not been consumed" all perfect
6 5/5
The wife arrived, saw the corpse and gave me my money. I was happy to receive my money.
Comments: Perfect - "gave me my money" acceptable; "I was happy to receive my money" excellent ablative absolute and deponent verb handling
7 5/5
However, afterwards, while the corpse was carried through the forum, this miracle happened: the corpse became alive!
Comments: Perfect - all elements correct; "the corpse became alive" excellent
8 4/5
He said he was killed by his wife; the witches consumed not his face but mine.
Comments: "He said he was killed by his wife" good indirect statement; "the witches consumed not his face but mine" excellent word order and clarity; -1 for missing pluperfect tense ("had been killed") though meaning is clear
9 4/5
I immediately touched my face: my nose and ears were now made of wax and fell off when I touched them! Suddenly I knew what happened. The weasel had been a witch and made me sleep
Comments: "I immediately touched my face" good; "made of wax and fell off when I touched them" perfect; "Suddenly I knew what happened" good; "had been a witch and made me sleep" excellent; essentially perfect
10 2/5
then the witches consumed my nose and ears and exchanged them with copies made of wax. Everyone laughed at me; I was very foolish.
Comments: "the witches consumed" good; "exchanged them with copies made of wax" excellent; "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I was very foolish" - loses superlative (should be "most foolish")
Gowri
Total: 28/50
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1 3/5
The old man told in this way: 'I accept the job at once having been led to the house where the dead body was lying. The wife of the dead body showed to me; that the face was still intact.
Comments: "told in this way" acceptable; "I accept" wrong tense; "having been led" wrong structure (should be "I was led"); "wife of the dead body" should be "dead man"; "showed to me" incomplete; "still intact" adds "still"
2 3/5
She warned me again to not fall asleep for a very short time, so that the witches won't eat the face. Promise me you will do this job faithfully.
Comments: "warned me again" - "again" not in Latin; "to not fall asleep for a very short time" acceptable but misses superlative; "Promise me you will do" - wrong person (should be "I promised")
3 5/5
Then the wife departed, and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing, I made an easy vigil.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present and correct
4 2/5
Then a weasel entered the bedroom; I chased it away as quickly as possible. At once however I felt my eyes become heavy.
Comments: "I chased it away as quickly as possible" adds "as possible"; missing "quam" (relative pronoun); "I felt my eyes become heavy" - missing comparative "heavier"; omits "I began to sleep"
5 3/5
I got up at first light; I hurried to the body terrified. By chance the face was not eaten.
Comments: "at first light" good; "hurried to the body terrified" acceptable; "By chance the face was not eaten" good; minor word order issues
6 1/5
The wife arrived, watched the body. I will give you my prize. I rejoiced and accepted the money.
Comments: "watched the body" acceptable; "I will give you my prize" - catastrophic error: wrong person, tense, and direction (should be "gave me a reward"); ablative absolute lost
7 4/5
Afterwards however while the body was being lead through the forum, this miracle happened: the dead body became alive!
Comments: "while the body was being lead" - spelling "lead" should be "led"; "the dead body became alive" perfect; all other elements correct
8 3/5
He said to himself to be killed by his wife; The witches, not their own but my face, consumed.
Comments: "He said to himself to be killed" - doesn't show indirect statement properly; "The witches, not their own but my face, consumed" - word order very confused but sense is there
9 3/5
My face at once I touch: my nose and ears were now made of wax and when I touch them they fall off! Suddenly I found out what had happened: The weasel was the witch and forced me to sleep
Comments: "My face at once I touch" - wrong tense and word order; "when I touch them they fall off" - tense should be past; "found out" acceptable; "forced me to sleep" good
10 1/5
then the witch eat the nose and ears and changed them with a wax copy. Everyone laughed at me : I had been the most stupid'
Comments: "the witch eat" - wrong tense (should be "the witches had consumed"); "changed them with" not quite right (should be "exchanged/replaced"); "Everyone laughed at me" good; "I had been the most stupid" perfect superlative
Leo
Total: 31/50
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1 4/5
The old man told this story: After immediately accepting the job, I was taken to the house where the dead body lay. A wife of the dead showed me the dead body; His face was intact.
Comments: "After immediately accepting the job, I was taken to the house" excellent ablative absolute and passive; "A wife of the dead" acceptable; "His face was intact" good; essentially all correct
2 2/5
She warned me not to sleep even for a short while, so that the face of the witch won't be consumed. I promised that I would do my job carefully.
Comments: "not to sleep even for a short while" good; "so that the face of the witch won't be consumed" - major error: should be "by witches", not "of the witch"; "I promised that I would do my job carefully" good but "carefully" instead of "faithfully"
3 5/5
Then the wife left and I was alone. I saw nothing for a long time; I easily kept watching.
Comments: Perfect - all elements correct; "I easily kept watching" excellent
4 4/5
Then a weasel entered the bedroom, which I quickly chased away. However I immediately felt that my eyes became heavier; I started sleeping.
Comments: "which I quickly chased away" perfect with relative pronoun; "I immediately felt that my eyes became heavier" excellent comparative; "I started sleeping" good; essentially perfect
5 3/5
At the first light, I got up. I ran terrified to the dead body. Perhaps the face had not been destroyed.
Comments: "At the first light, I got up" good; "I ran terrified to the dead body" good; "Perhaps the face had not been destroyed" - "Perhaps" acceptable for "forte"; "destroyed" less precise than "consumed"
6 3/5
The wife arrived, looked at the dead bodies and gave me a reward. I was happy to receive the money.
Comments: "looked at the dead bodies" - should be singular "body"; "gave me a reward" excellent; "I was happy to receive the money" good handling of ablative absolute
7 4/5
However later, while the dead body was being carried through the forum, this miracle happened: The dead body became alive. He said that he was killed by his wife
Comments: "while the dead body was being carried through the forum" perfect; "The dead body became alive" excellent; "He said that he was killed by his wife" good; all essentially correct with very minor tense issue only (pluperfect preferred)
8 1/5
The witches had [INCOMPLETE - text cuts off]
Comments: Sentence incomplete/cut off; appears to be missing significant portion of the translation
9 3/5
I immediately touched my face: Noses and ears were now made of wax and when I touched them they fell off. I suddenly knew what had happened: The weasel had been a witch and had made me fall asleep.
Comments: "I immediately touched my face" good; "Noses and ears" should be "my nose and ears"; "were now made of wax and when I touched them they fell off" perfect; "suddenly knew what had happened" excellent
10 2/5
Then the witches had eaten my nose and ears and replaced them with copies made of wax. Everyone laughed at me; I was stupid.
Comments: "the witches had eaten my nose and ears" acceptable tense; "replaced them with copies made of wax" excellent; "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I was stupid" - loses superlative (should be "most stupid")
Rory
Total: 47/50
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1 5/5
Thus the old man said: "Accepting the job at once I was led to the house where the corpse lay. The wife of the dead man showed the corpse to me. The face was intact.
Comments: Perfect - "Accepting the job at once I was led to the house" excellent ablative absolute; "The wife of the dead man showed the corpse to me" perfect; "The face was intact" correct
2 5/5
She warned me to neither sleep even very briefly, lest the face be consumed by witches. I promised that I would do my job faithfully.
Comments: Excellent - "to neither sleep even very briefly" perfect showing of superlative; "lest the face be consumed by witches" perfect purpose clause; "I promised that I would do my job faithfully" excellent indirect statement
3 5/5
Then the wife departed, and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing. It was easy to be vigil.
Comments: Perfect - all elements present and correct; "It was easy to be vigil" creative and accurate
4 4/5
Then a weasel entered the bedroom. Which I quickly chased away. At once however I felt my eyes become heavy. I began to sleep.
Comments: "Which I quickly chased away" perfect with relative pronoun; "I felt my eyes become heavy" - needs comparative "heavier"; "I began to sleep" perfect
5 5/5
At first light I rose, ran to the corpse terrified. By chance the face was not consumed.
Comments: Perfect - "At first light I rose, ran to the corpse terrified" excellent; "By chance the face was not consumed" all correct
6 4/5
The wife arrived, she saw the body, she gave the prize to me. Delighted, I accepted the money.
Comments: "she saw the body, she gave the prize to me" good; "Delighted, I accepted the money" excellent handling of ablative absolute and deponent verb; -1 for slightly repetitive structure with "she...she..." - minor stylistic point only
7 5/5
However afterwards, when the corpse was taken through the forum, this miracle happened. The corpse became alive. He said that he was killed by his wife.
Comments: Perfect - "when the corpse was taken through the forum" excellent; "The corpse became alive" perfect; "He said that he was killed by his wife" excellent indirect statement
8 4/5
The witches did not consume the face of him but of mine.
Comments: "The witches did not consume the face of him but of mine" excellent clarity and structure; -1 for "of him but of mine" slightly awkward phrasing (could be "his but mine") - very minor stylistic point
9 5/5
At once I touched my face, nose and ears which were now made of wax and when I touched them they fell off! Suddenly I realised what had happened. The weasel was the witch and forced me to fall asleep.
Comments: Perfect - "At once I touched my face, nose and ears which were now made of wax" excellent with relative clause; "when I touched them they fell off" perfect; "Suddenly I realised what had happened" excellent; "forced me to fall asleep" good
10 5/5
Then the witch consumed my nose and ears and replaced them with a copy made of wax. Everyone laughed at me. I was the most stupid."
Comments: Perfect - "the witch consumed my nose and ears" good; "replaced them with a copy made of wax" excellent; "Everyone laughed at me" perfect; "I was the most stupid" perfect superlative
Maya
Total: 23/50
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1 2/5
The old man has told thus: I accepted the job. Immediately I was taken to a house where bodies lied. My wife showed the died body; the face was in tact.
Comments: "has told" - wrong tense (should be past); "I accepted the job. Immediately I was taken" - breaks ablative absolute into two sentences; "bodies lied" - should be singular "body lay"; "My wife" - should be "the dead man's wife"; "died body" should be "dead body"
2 2/5
She warned me that not also in the shortest sleep, the witch would be about to eat from the face. I promised me to make the job faithful.
Comments: "not also in the shortest sleep" - confused structure (should be "not to sleep even very briefly"); "would be about to eat from the face" - wrong construction; "I promised me" - wrong reflexive (should be "I promised"); "to make the job faithful" - wrong structure (should be "I would do the job faithfully")
3 3/5
The wife left, and I was alone. For a long time I saw nothing; the watch was easy made.
Comments: "The wife left, and I was alone" good; "For a long time I saw nothing" perfect; "the watch was easy made" - passive voice error (should be "it was easy to keep watch") but sense is present
4 2/5
Then a weasel entered the bedroom, than I chase it away fastly. At once, however, I felt my eyes became heavy; I began to sleep.
Comments: "than I chase" - "than" should be "which"; wrong tense; "fastly" not a word (should be "quickly"); "my eyes became heavy" - missing comparative "heavier"; "I began to sleep" good
5 2/5
First I got up through the light; I ran terrified towards the bodies.
Comments: "First I got up through the light" - confused (should be "At first light I got up"); "towards the bodies" - should be singular "body"; missing "By chance the face was not consumed" - incomplete section
6 2/5
The widow arrived. she looked at the body and gave me the reward. 'I accepted the money with gratitude'.
Comments: "The widow" - wrong word (should be "wife"); "gave me the reward" good; quote marks incorrect; "I accepted the money with gratitude" - loses ablative absolute structure; capital letter error after period
7 4/5
Afterwards however, while the body was taken through the forum, this miracle happened: the body became alive!
Comments: "while the body was taken through the forum" good passive; "this miracle happened" good; "the body became alive" perfect; missing "He said that he had been killed by his wife" but core elements present
8 2/5
He said himself that he was killed by the widow; the witch did not want to eat him, but my face.
Comments: "He said himself" - awkward structure; "he was killed" - wrong tense (should be "had been killed"); "by the widow" - wrong word (should be "wife"); "did not want to eat him, but my face" - wrong construction (should be "had not consumed his face but mine")
9 2/5
I touched my face immediately: the nose and the ears were made of wax now and they silently fell off. Suddenly i found out what had happened. The witch turned into a weasel and i began to sleep.
Comments: "I touched my face immediately" good; "the nose and the ears were made of wax now" acceptable; "they silently fell off" - adds "silently"; "Suddenly I found out what had happened" good; "The witch turned into a weasel" - backwards (should be "weasel had been a witch"); "i began to sleep" - wrong (should be "forced me to sleep")
10 2/5
Then the witch ate my nose and ears and replaced them with copies made of wax. All laughed at me: I was very foolish!
Comments: "the witch ate" - wrong tense and number (should be "the witches had consumed"); "replaced them with copies made of wax" good; "All laughed at me" acceptable; "I was very foolish" - loses superlative (should be "most foolish")

Class Summary

Student Total Mark Percentage Grade Indicator
Carl 48/50 96% Outstanding
Rory 47/50 94% Excellent
Eva 42/50 84% Excellent
Margarethe 41/50 82% Excellent
Eloise 38/50 76% Very Good
Frido 37/50 74% Very Good
Nikhel 35/50 70% Good
Leo 31/50 62% Satisfactory
Gowri 28/50 56% Satisfactory
Maya 23/50 46% Needs Work

Class Performance Analysis

Class Average: 37.0/50 (74%)

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